Bezman's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[News Reporter V]

Change the button.

I shouldn't be giving you constructive crit, seeing as you haven't changed the button. I will, however, say this.

The intro/loader you have works brilliantly, Seeing as you use them in every toon, it's worth spending time there. The end is no exception. I like how the grey rounded square provides a contrast with the black and clearly denoted the hitbox. However, the grey and cyan don't really work in the context of the slighty futuristic minimalistic colours. Consider replacing the solid grey with apattern or outline if you want to follow the futuristic feel you've set by the text.

You also really need a graphical change for on rollover. Maybe have a colour shift, or even a little 'sheen'? - a whit slanted rectangle passing by, combined with a mask works well.

Anyways, I vaguely liked the 'read all about it' song, however, ______

Omega 2 had some decent acting in his lines.

There's other stuff I wasn't keen on, but I choose to only mention the button. Seriously, your button irritates me more than reasonable.

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kinggila responds:

That's what I get for copying frames of the credits from another flash. The replay button should have been the blue font just like the credits text. :(

Thanks for point that out Bezman.

[Fairwell Ross]

Ross deserves some tributes...

Nicely drawn logo and cool voice at the start.

My first gripe is with the buttons in the menu - you didn't change the graphics for the 'rollover' frame so it isn't as obvious as it could be what's a button and what's being selected.

iShirm's part was nicely drawn (although the animation was fairly minimalistic).

Doesn't seem very pleasant a 'tribute' though and as a tongue-in-cheek joke, it didn't actually make me laugh.

In your part, things could have generally been drawn better - specially the crumpled up paper.

I guess the end frame is meant to be charming in ist's simplicity/primitiveness? I think the two sides could have been clearer - are they meant to be cliffs?Mountains? and some of the lines you have could have maybe been omitted for a cleaner look.

I liked the jolly tune and colours though and the font reminds me of a holiday postcard.

It's a cool tribute and would certainly make me smile if it were dedicated to me.

I felt a bit underwhelmed by this though - might be the length or the lack of real humour or other substance (to my mind).

Little-Rena responds:

I didn't see the need to have a rollover frame, since there is a change of cursor for when you hover over a button anyway. iShirms part could have had more animation and blah yeah but I had no control over that.

One thing that bugs me is, you saying I could have "drawn better", no I couldn't, if I could have drawn better I would have drawn better. Belive me, I drew what I could, look at my eariler flash and you'll see that I've actually done a little better with my drawing here, so I find that comment quite rude.

As for the end loop to my part, that was just suppost to be silly and everything, didn't hostly put a whole lot of effort into making it, so yeah, the sides where ment to be buildings, Yahoo having more to represent a bigger company.

[I hate MAC ads]

Yeah, even macs break down.

Stupid piece of shit computers. Also - why do people call 'Windows-compatible machines' PCs, as if a mac isn't a personal computer?

I liked the expressions on PC and the lack of movement on mac. PC could have had some crazy body poses though, to fit his character.

The blurry lines on the penguin made it look wierd.

Nothing bad about the toon, but it could have had more jokes or something. Although I'm not sure that would be totally compatible with your slightly serious point...

The basic point you make is totally one I agree with and it was a fun watch.

[Orange Rhymes]

Love your style.

I love the new style you've got here and in your Pico Day submission.

Great shapes and characters. Kinda looks like it was made in the 60s or 70s,

My favourite part was the credits. What's that font you use for 'replay'?

Sound effects were cool.

I didn't really understand it was meant to be the blind man driving when I first watched. Maybe a shot of him exiting on that side would have made that joke more immediate?

Anyways, I love this visually but the jokes were enh.

[MTC Vs. Pico.]

Fairly fun

Tom looked fairly cute.

You should've had some moving mouths - it didn't really seem like the wee boy was dissing MTC - more like someone else had said that line and he had stepped on-camera.

The words at the start were kinda hard to understand.

I liked the ending.

To me it seems like you could've fitted in a few visual jokes, with Pico/MTC downing beer/shots before Pico collapses. Might have helped with the flow, too.

Cool vibes though.

TheCriminalDuder responds:

Big thanks. Ya, I think from now on if I don't have time to add somethin' I'll be bittin' the bullet and get-her-done on a later date. Till then I'll also see if I can reorganize my schedule so I have more time to work.

[Pico v. Teh UberKidz]

Kinda cute drawings/voices/sfx.

My favourite part was Nene sucking darnell.

The drawings were pretty cute and though it wasn't anything but tweens, it is kinda charming.

I was really hoping for more jokes though - there's already so many of these intentionally primitive flashes, that it's no longer a novelty. You need to introduce more jokes or something else to pull it up.

tehslaphappy responds:

Okie.....Thanks. :3

[Tom's Birthday Song]

Cool homage

Matched the style of his song/animation fairly well.

Do you really know him well enough for him to be your friend though?

Could have had more jokes in it, and some rhymes feeled a bit obvious/forced, like the beard being 'a fright'.

However, it was an enjoyable watch. Music was recorded really cleanly.

Rudy responds:

Yeah, I wanted to match his song style and animation. :) And no, I personally do not know Tom. I'm sure the staff think i'm some creeper but honestly, the creator of Newgrounds, is a friend of mine (:

[a PICO DAY message]

Cool concept.

Models, rigging and animating all within 7 hours? Nice.

The gloves looked a bit too big - like they were nearly twice the length they should be.

The voice was totally awesome and made the animation for me. Spot on impersonation and good acting!

Some decent mouth shapes and a bit of body language - could have gone a lot further in that area, but I'll overlook it.

Seeing this from you definitely added to the greatness of the day, even though it wasn't necessarily a better entry. Cool concept.

Jazza responds:

nah just the animation... i had the models done a few weeks ago

[Pico the Legend]

Would be forgettable if it weren't for the credits

The movie itself was mediocre at best. Some sloppy lines and really rough characters generally. The mispelling 'hade' instead of 'had' added to the half-arsed feeling.

Some scenes did manage to raise a smile at least - seeing tom in there, Pico on an elephant and the characters against a photo were notable.

Really, the credits were something I'll never forget though. I can only imagine what inspired such a ridiculous ordeal. I chuckled.

Also, dancing Nene looked fairly cool. I liked the style of the flat coloured, slightly abstracted shapes on the black.

[Music Video Collection]

Work on your graphics. I liked a couple of bits th

I liked the idea of mixing up a load of songs, but some of them needed more time to be developed, most would have benefited from more of your own interpretation and your graphics did bring the whole thing down.

Let's start from the beginning. The typography in the menu is reasonable - the fonts working well. But why is your name and the title that later appears Times New Roman? Seems inappropriate.

Song 1 - too literal. Your graphics add nothing that wasn't mentioned in the song.

Song 2 - at least you bring in the Chuck Norris joke.

3 - I liked the ending, with the lyrics.

4 - Here, the overly literal translation actually made me chuckle.

5 - A beautiful interpretation that I hadn't heard before. The cut-off was a bit abrupt. I liked

6 = Again, way too literal

7 - I liked the colouring of the guy's face and shaded chin. I liked your interpretation. Definitely ending on a strong point.

Apart from the lack of creative interpretation, your biggest issue was definitely the graphics. I don't know where to suggest you start improving - the proportions could have been more consistent, don't use the brightest colours - use something a bit less saturated for grass (for example) - take more time over your lines...

Just practise, give yourself more time to do your work, and you'll get there.

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Assios responds:

Thanks. I appreciate that you give me feedback on each of the seven songs ;)