Makes me smile. Ace guitar. Lacklustre vocals.
Some great guitar work (specially at the start and during the solo) and I enjoyed the backing vocals.
This song makes me smile, with its upbeat lyrics and uptempo timing.
My only criticism is the lead vocals - they don't really have the energy I'd hope for.
Is Mrs Sharrar your teacher?
Nice chords indeed, but short and lacking developm
I like the bass at around 12s.
Is this a single playing? Well played!
I did feel though, that the rhythm of 'treble solo notes' followed by chords was kinda simplistic.
The whole thing was exceedingly short too, for a non-loop.
Like your other piece, I'd have liked to see more development.
and this is the original version. we were not allowed to use inharmonic tones or any 7 chords other than the dominant. We were forced to work with only this part of Amazing Grace and I tried my best to have the bassline be merely an accompaniment, not a melody.
i got a 97 btw. thanks for the review
doubling-up sounds good. But develop it more!
I liked the way it sounded thanks to you doubling-up on all the notes.
I don't understand why there's about 20s of silence at the end.
Also, you could have developed the piece a bit more... it does sound like you kinda thought of something interesting to do with the tune, but then left it that. Develop it!
It does sound good though, specially if you listen to the other version just before, as I did. (Listening to NGAPRadio with shuffle off.)
the other version was a music theory project that i did. i expanded on it with this. the 20s of silence was because i forgot to delete the extra measures in finale(oops). I should fledge it out more and add some of my own rhythms too.
thanks for the review
Soothing... relaxing... I wish it lasted longer.
"Feel free to feel anything." heheh. Great line.
The whole piece is wonderfully relaxing. Soothing. Listening on NGAPRadio, I immediately jumped back to this and put it on repeat.
I just found it short for a piece that doesn't loop!
There are some beautiful parts, specially the chords around the 9/10s mark the parts around the 25ish, 37ish, 49ish...well, you have a beautiful melodic journey.
The last 10-20s seem kinda stuttered though as do a few points around the 1-min mark. That let it down slightly.
I do wish it looped or was longer.
Was this improvised? If so, I'd love to hear something similar that you spend time composing! If not, lengthen the piece!
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I could fall in love with a piece like this.
It reminds me of XJapan's 'Endless Rain', which is a big compliment!
I just wish it lasted forever - or failing that - longer.
thanks for the long review. this was in fact something like an improvisation, not perfect. I'll try to 'fix it' and possibly make it longer in some way. thanx!
Fun to listen to. Not orchestral. LBT?
Orchestral? Sounds more like a piano-set keyboard, drums and a synthed violin kicking in around the 1-minute mark. When I think 'orchestral', I really don't imagine drums and I don't think of a piano playing the entire melody - I think of a symphony being orchestrated to share the melody.
Regardless, I enjoyed this. The melody had a pleasantly upbeat, uptempo vibe and when the drums kicked in, I digged.
The keyboard is really well played (if it's on a keyboard) and the various instruments well put together.
One question for you - what is 'LBT'?
I probably would have preferred it if it had actually been more orchestral, or if it had had some more variations, but it was good to listen to.
Good work!
The Land Before Time
Like "Anthony and the Johnsons". Polished but...
The production is great. The piano is all fairly tight and the voice is never strained.
When the chorus comes in half-way through and again in the last minute, that sounds great. I heard a backing instrument that sounds a bit like a synthed violin chorus. Works well.
I felt the lyrics generally felt a bit cliche'd and false. You had some decent rhymes, but it never felt like you were writing from experience.
If you were, then sorry. You shouldn't dwell on such things.
The piano seemed a bit overly predictable and simplistic. There were some great chords and harmonies with the backing instruments, but I felt like a few diversions from the main theme, maybe even a few grace notes here and there, would have added to the piece.
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I commend you and your friend's abilities in making it sound so polished. However, it just didn't sound interesting. To me it seemed slightly vacuous.
I'd like to hear something you wrote from experience.
Uhm, I hate to break it to you, mate, but it's very much based on personal experiences. Lol...
I don't know what to tell you, but yeah. I'm a manic depressive / bi-polar disorder patient, and I think along these lines... well, alot.
kick ass. Odd. Bubbles.
2nd listen:
Right the start (the 6s mark) you have a pretty odd slide, giving a good indication of the meandering twists this is gonna take.
The bubbling noise is bizarre and around 0:46 the guitar sounds vaguely like a creaking door.
I liked the increasing tempo of the rhythm guitar, but that faded away without me noticing...
2:35 - some interesting use of stereo. Picking up a real sense of rhythm... I'm getting in the groove... and then it decides to lie down.
3:49 - some crazy meshing going on with the guitar, the bass and the bubbles... what are those bubbles? It just reminds me of a hubble bubble - those bib bong-type things with a big pipe. Or maybe just a bong.
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Waited a while. Listened to it a few more times. I have nothing bad to say about it.
It could maybe be a bit more striking, a bit more surreal, a bit more beautiful, a bit more soothing... But how to get there... I have no advice on.
It's a kick ass track already in any case.
I appreciate the in depth listen. Alas, this song is simply the exploration of sounds with no rhyme or reason. No drugs or alcohol influenced.
27s devlopement ; 2:40 of a 4s loop. NEEDS VARIETY
You've got some tight beats, but you really need to do more with it all round.
I enjoyed the way it started off - with the various layers being introduced. After around 27s though, it all sounds exactly the same.
I like the faint 3-note melody in the background. Only noticed that after around a minute and a half, but I realised upon inspection that it was there all along...
Anyway, this is cool, but why you'd submit a tune with 27s of development and 3 minutes of a 4s loop is beyond me.
Why don't you take the 4s loop, then make that into a loop and submit it as that? It sounds like that could work brilliantly for some game level or a menu.
If you want it to be a tune, you've got to have waaaaay more diversity. As an example of something with variation, I was listening to NGAPRadio and this is what came on after your tune:
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/view.php?id=1807651&sub=773
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Love the feel-good vibe. Needs more variety.
I love the vibe. It's country, with a techno beat. It does really sound so beautifully easy going.
I did definitely find it a bit repetitive though. If you cut the section from 16s-35s, threw away the rest, then just worked to make those 19s loop perfectly, that'd capture the flavour pretty well and it would be a brilliant loop for a menu or a single level in a game. And 19s - small filesize!
Seriously! I urge you to make a tiny loop, as I'm sure you're capable of. I know I'd definitely try and use it and I'm sure loads of others would too.
I like the way that section is introduced. I liked the variations around the 1:10 mark. I liked the chilling out at 1:40 ish. Loved the way you brought it back in (though maybe a touch louder on the bass beat at that point would've worked well).
I just don't like the way that for the most part it's just a repetition of a 20s piece, with variations here and there. I think I just don't consider the variations enough to make this into a perfect piece as it could be. I'd love to see you develop this further, maybe changing up the melodies a bit more, maybe playing with the effects and volumes... maybe you could keep the quiet part quiet for longer and add in a soft piccolo or something... Don't constrain yourself too much with the awesome section you've got here - maybe kill some instruments and throw in a new melody riding over it all at one or two sections?
Just throwing in ideas.
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Basically, I think this is awesome. It's a brilliant feel-good track and I love the vibe. I just think that as a piece of music it has the potential to be taken further with more interesting variations.
But in any case, you've SERIOUSLY got to make this into a short, seamless 19s loop like I said.
That would be BRILLIANT!
Thanks for the review. I can't believe I forgot to respond for such a long time lol
thought it was Tetris... fun. Nothing spectacular.
When the lead melody came in at 0:45, I thought at first it was a funked'n'danced-up remix of the Tetris tune!
The slow part around 3:20 could have been the lengthier notes of the Tetris tune...
Anyways, this is fun to listen to. Good quality dance tune with some decent variations. I reckon you could definitely take it further though - maybe add on another layer, maybe vary it further...
On repeat, I turned it off after 3 listens. I suppose dance tunes tend to not have brilliant replayability though...
As I said, fun to listen to. Maybe you could make a dance version of the tetris tune?
"When the lead melody came in at 0:45, I thought at first it was a funked'n'danced-up remix of the Tetris tune!"
LOL. Weird. XD
"The slow part around 3:20 could have been the lengthier notes of the Tetris tune..."
Could have....XD
"Anyways, this is fun to listen to. Good quality dance tune with some decent variations. I reckon you could definitely take it further though - maybe add on another layer, maybe vary it further..."
LOL. Take it further how? And add what?
"On repeat, I turned it off after 3 listens. I suppose dance tunes tend to not have brilliant replayability though..."
Depends what you are into. Some tracks are great for looping.
"As I said, fun to listen to. Maybe you could make a dance version of the tetris tune?"
That is what I was going to do originally. XD I think I will do it. i'm thinking Commercial Trance for the kiddies and noobs to 'Techno'.
Thanks for you review. XD
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