Just not as good.
Liked the 'lemon' part.
It obviously wasn't as strong as the original. The 'tattoo' joke was weak and we frankly don't care bout what your favourite FPS games are. At least Allen's fave NG subs had some relevance to NG and therefore some resonance with the audience.
I think the lesson here is to bring in some individuality but keep it fast (don't linger on one element like you did the dick jokes) and keep it relevant (mentioning the homework was fair enough - but more about NG pls).
The actual animation/video editing was reasonably done though.
Ultimately, it's cool to see an alternative take on an idea but there's no argument about which is better.