Bezman's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[All Your Leet]

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I'm not sure what emotion you hoped to spark. Confusion? Nostalgia? Anger? Bemusement?

In me, this provoked the marginal confusion above and perhaps also disappointment and boredom. Nothing else.

IThe title screen - with badly drawn text shifitng around - just doesn't look good. If you're gonna draw out text, make it well drawn.

I haven't seen the intro drawn out before, but the fact that it was drawn, rather than the original screenshots, actually reduced the appeal imo. Your drawings weren't graphically appealing.

I kina liked the pic with the petrol station prices, as it seemed like something that could actually happen in life without staging and wasn't obvious like the clocks.

I admit I never liked the original though and any 'craze' is long passed. The idea of this kind of slideshow just seems kind of boring - amusing the first time you see it, but never thereafter.

Sispri responds:

Fads pass and I guess this is old.

[Under My Voodoo]

apply that sam

The red writing at the start looks really messy and the times new roman font didn't seem appropriate - something big, blocky and sans-serif seems like it'd work better.

The clouds were drawn pretty well and other graphical highlights included the text on the list, the light streaming in (with particle effects), eyebrow raise, hawt sause, the sequence with the pot travelling through brightly coloured patterns, the start of the fish torture scene and the background during the ending sequence.

During the fish scene, the lips seemed to stop moving for a while.

At the end credits, text is way too bright to have enough contrast to read comfortably. Make it darker and perhaps more saturated. Maybe brown?

A lot of the time, the brush strokes seemed a bit messy. I'm gonna guess that where it was cleaner you just spent more time on it. If you carried the standard of the parts I mentioned throughout the movie, this could be an award winner! Do the work!

I couldn't really understand it all and though some parts were fun - fish/skull-bouncing/yellow smiley... - a bunch of sections just weren't fun to watch as I couldn't understand any of the lyrics nor the narrative. So where he was putting in things into the pot, it seemed more boring than suspenseful or whatever. If you wanted it to be more entertaining, maybe you could have had little jokes for each item. Once could be a handful of maggots - he'd open his fridge, find a mouldy sandwich with maggots in and pop it in.

That's just an idea off the top of my head. I'm sure you could do equally good or better ones for the other ingredients.

Anyways, all in all, I enjoyed some parts of this graphically, and the end bg is beautiful.

However, you need to work on your story-telling and apply that same graphical polish elsewhere.

Voodoo responds:

Thanks, I liked the light through the hole c:
As for the understanding, there really is nothing to get. The story was lacking, I was really just having fun with the song.

[News Reporter V]

Change the button.

I shouldn't be giving you constructive crit, seeing as you haven't changed the button. I will, however, say this.

The intro/loader you have works brilliantly, Seeing as you use them in every toon, it's worth spending time there. The end is no exception. I like how the grey rounded square provides a contrast with the black and clearly denoted the hitbox. However, the grey and cyan don't really work in the context of the slighty futuristic minimalistic colours. Consider replacing the solid grey with apattern or outline if you want to follow the futuristic feel you've set by the text.

You also really need a graphical change for on rollover. Maybe have a colour shift, or even a little 'sheen'? - a whit slanted rectangle passing by, combined with a mask works well.

Anyways, I vaguely liked the 'read all about it' song, however, ______

Omega 2 had some decent acting in his lines.

There's other stuff I wasn't keen on, but I choose to only mention the button. Seriously, your button irritates me more than reasonable.

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-Review Request Club-

kinggila responds:

That's what I get for copying frames of the credits from another flash. The replay button should have been the blue font just like the credits text. :(

Thanks for point that out Bezman.

[Fairwell Ross]

Ross deserves some tributes...

Nicely drawn logo and cool voice at the start.

My first gripe is with the buttons in the menu - you didn't change the graphics for the 'rollover' frame so it isn't as obvious as it could be what's a button and what's being selected.

iShirm's part was nicely drawn (although the animation was fairly minimalistic).

Doesn't seem very pleasant a 'tribute' though and as a tongue-in-cheek joke, it didn't actually make me laugh.

In your part, things could have generally been drawn better - specially the crumpled up paper.

I guess the end frame is meant to be charming in ist's simplicity/primitiveness? I think the two sides could have been clearer - are they meant to be cliffs?Mountains? and some of the lines you have could have maybe been omitted for a cleaner look.

I liked the jolly tune and colours though and the font reminds me of a holiday postcard.

It's a cool tribute and would certainly make me smile if it were dedicated to me.

I felt a bit underwhelmed by this though - might be the length or the lack of real humour or other substance (to my mind).

Little-Rena responds:

I didn't see the need to have a rollover frame, since there is a change of cursor for when you hover over a button anyway. iShirms part could have had more animation and blah yeah but I had no control over that.

One thing that bugs me is, you saying I could have "drawn better", no I couldn't, if I could have drawn better I would have drawn better. Belive me, I drew what I could, look at my eariler flash and you'll see that I've actually done a little better with my drawing here, so I find that comment quite rude.

As for the end loop to my part, that was just suppost to be silly and everything, didn't hostly put a whole lot of effort into making it, so yeah, the sides where ment to be buildings, Yahoo having more to represent a bigger company.

[MTC Vs. Pico.]

Fairly fun

Tom looked fairly cute.

You should've had some moving mouths - it didn't really seem like the wee boy was dissing MTC - more like someone else had said that line and he had stepped on-camera.

The words at the start were kinda hard to understand.

I liked the ending.

To me it seems like you could've fitted in a few visual jokes, with Pico/MTC downing beer/shots before Pico collapses. Might have helped with the flow, too.

Cool vibes though.

TheCriminalDuder responds:

Big thanks. Ya, I think from now on if I don't have time to add somethin' I'll be bittin' the bullet and get-her-done on a later date. Till then I'll also see if I can reorganize my schedule so I have more time to work.

[Pico v. Teh UberKidz]

Kinda cute drawings/voices/sfx.

My favourite part was Nene sucking darnell.

The drawings were pretty cute and though it wasn't anything but tweens, it is kinda charming.

I was really hoping for more jokes though - there's already so many of these intentionally primitive flashes, that it's no longer a novelty. You need to introduce more jokes or something else to pull it up.

tehslaphappy responds:

Okie.....Thanks. :3

[Tom's Birthday Song]

Cool homage

Matched the style of his song/animation fairly well.

Do you really know him well enough for him to be your friend though?

Could have had more jokes in it, and some rhymes feeled a bit obvious/forced, like the beard being 'a fright'.

However, it was an enjoyable watch. Music was recorded really cleanly.

Rudy responds:

Yeah, I wanted to match his song style and animation. :) And no, I personally do not know Tom. I'm sure the staff think i'm some creeper but honestly, the creator of Newgrounds, is a friend of mine (:

[a PICO DAY message]

Cool concept.

Models, rigging and animating all within 7 hours? Nice.

The gloves looked a bit too big - like they were nearly twice the length they should be.

The voice was totally awesome and made the animation for me. Spot on impersonation and good acting!

Some decent mouth shapes and a bit of body language - could have gone a lot further in that area, but I'll overlook it.

Seeing this from you definitely added to the greatness of the day, even though it wasn't necessarily a better entry. Cool concept.

Jazza responds:

nah just the animation... i had the models done a few weeks ago

[Music Video Collection]

Work on your graphics. I liked a couple of bits th

I liked the idea of mixing up a load of songs, but some of them needed more time to be developed, most would have benefited from more of your own interpretation and your graphics did bring the whole thing down.

Let's start from the beginning. The typography in the menu is reasonable - the fonts working well. But why is your name and the title that later appears Times New Roman? Seems inappropriate.

Song 1 - too literal. Your graphics add nothing that wasn't mentioned in the song.

Song 2 - at least you bring in the Chuck Norris joke.

3 - I liked the ending, with the lyrics.

4 - Here, the overly literal translation actually made me chuckle.

5 - A beautiful interpretation that I hadn't heard before. The cut-off was a bit abrupt. I liked

6 = Again, way too literal

7 - I liked the colouring of the guy's face and shaded chin. I liked your interpretation. Definitely ending on a strong point.

Apart from the lack of creative interpretation, your biggest issue was definitely the graphics. I don't know where to suggest you start improving - the proportions could have been more consistent, don't use the brightest colours - use something a bit less saturated for grass (for example) - take more time over your lines...

Just practise, give yourself more time to do your work, and you'll get there.

-review request club-

Assios responds:

Thanks. I appreciate that you give me feedback on each of the seven songs ;)

[LOVEBLIMP]

Good vibrations.

That was pretty cool.

Simple plot, but nice vibes. Also, the graphics for the smiling blimps and the end song pretty much make it.

The graphics near the start leave something to be desired. The words could have been better decorated - maybe having 3d-style block letters or something for 'love' etc and more angular letters for 'war' etc.

The bomb could have used some shading and the frame for when the green blimp drops his cigar could have been better.

Also, the blurry rainbow doesn't fit in brilliantly with the crisp vectors in my opinion.

Your smiling faces rock though, the hearts-as-smoketrails are awesome and the song is brilliant.

Makes me smile, despite slight graphical issues.

-Review Request Club-

WritersBlock responds:

Yeah, it's not the best, but the style is simple and attractive, despite the flaws.

Maybe next year I could put more time and effort into a Loveblimp-2. LOL
<3
Thanks for the review.